Forum:Red Dead Revenge

This is my idea for a sequal to Red Dead Redemption. The year is 1917 and you are playing as Jack Marston in a trench in WW1. You fight off a German attack and then Jack Marston gets shot in the chest and blacks out. He wakes up in a military hospital and is told that he is heading home. Once he reaches his ranch he sees that it is falling apart. Learing his life is going no where he becomes a cop. He learns that many of the police officers are corrupt and than he informes the Marshal. The cops are fired and they set out to kill Jack. He is at his ranch eating dinner and sees torches and quickly gets his guns. He gets on his horse and rides off looking back in horror as they destroy Jack's home and destroy John's, Abigal's, and uncle's grave. The police in Blackwater won't help him so he decides to tale the law into his own hands. Jack then goes into Mexico to find Abraham Reyes. Reyes won't help Jack stating he does not remember a John Marston and told Jack to get out. Infuriated he and Reyes have a duel and Jack shoots him in the head and battles his way out of Escalara. He then meets an old Red Harlow (if too old than another famous gunslinger). Red agrees to help Jack in his quest. Then the Mexican army and the dirty cops show up. Red and Jack battle their way out and flee into New Austin. Red teaches Jack some new tricks and they are once more attacked by the dirty cops. After a quick battle Red gets shot and Jack takes the lifless body of Red and flees. He goes to Coot's Chapel and buries him their and makes him a wooden gravestone similar to John's. When all of John's old friend won't help him Jack learns that he is on his own. Jack then track's down and kills most of the dirty cops. Jack then learns the leader of the cops is near Armadillo. He runs into a marashal. The marashal agrees to help him. After Jack kills the leader in a duel he says "I guess I start fromt the bottom up." It is then shown Jack building his ranch with a new gravestones from John, Abigal, and uncle. So that is my idea for a sequal. Like it don't like? Let me know and what things you would change.