Thread:Jackhorton98/@comment-37973629-20190912090005

Hello again.

Please refrain from adding: “little did he know that Jack wiould kill him 15 years later as a young man to avenge his father's death” to the Jack Marston and Edgar Ross pages. The sentence is not relevant to the particular section and therefore ruins the fluency of the text. In addition, it’s actually quite a minor thing when you think about it in context, because a lot of characters have interactions with their future killers and yet it would not seem fitting to add it (for example, you wouldn’t mention on Micah's page that he met John, who would kill him in eight years time), so why do it for this particular one?

Furthermore, it essentially spoils what will happen at the end. The Horseshoe Overlook chapter section is for what happens in the Horseshoe Overlook chapter, it shouldn’t spoil what happens at the end of the game. This goes back to what I said it being irrelevant, but it also gives information that the reader would arguably rather not know at that time. Again, you wouldn’t put, in the background section of Arthur's page, for example, “Arthur and Mary ended their relationship, and the latter married Barry Linton. However, he died of a lung illness, just like Arthur would later on”. It spoils what happens and isn’t relevant.

I’m sorry if this comes across as overly critical, but I thought I should at least give you an explanation as to why it shouldn’t be on the page. Happy editing! 